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外孫女的記者處女作

作者:Duffy  於 2023-6-11 01:46 發表於 最熱鬧的華人社交網路--貝殼村

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外孫女的記者處女作

我的外孫女Kathleen已經高二了,可想而知,作為第一代移民的父母,只知道自己工作的壓力,生活的艱辛,只看到孩子們的活蹦亂跳,卻不知這些出生在美國的二代華裔學生們,在父母巨大的壓力下,要門門功課全優,又要琴棋書畫全能,既要不忘祖宗勤學漢語,又要種族融合參加各種業餘活動,還要莫名其妙地承受上至美國總統,下至無知小民們對在美華人的無端仇恨,加上華裔不但理所當然地受到黑人,甚至老墨的歧視,直至拳腳相加,搶劫槍殺,甚至還會受到同是亞裔的韓裔、日裔、印裔的排擠。你簡直難以置信,在二十一世紀的今天,在處處世界領先的美國,一個夢想爬藤的華裔二代孩子,無論你多麼努力,成績多麼優秀,竟然可以堂爾皇之地被藤校以你的一個華裔姓氏而拒之門外。我們的華裔二代及他們的子孫們還有漫長的、艱難的路要走。美國 決不是天堂,美國還需要所有各族裔,各時代的移民共同奮鬥,促使社會的進步。中國也是如此。Kathleen不是一個死讀書的孩子,她的愛好非常廣泛,特別是她還不屬於那種特別聰明的華裔孩子,通常,華裔學生們在數學方面,公認有著特殊天分,可是Kathleen在數學、化學方面學起來很吃力,要取得滿分,她要花比別人多兩倍到三倍的時間和精力。 上高中以後,我就從來沒見過她在夜裡1點以前睡過覺。 她很喜歡排球,連續幾年都參加學校和市裡俱樂部排球隊的訓練和比賽,這又幾乎佔據了她本來就很有限的業餘時間,這次,她居然自己報名參加了她們高中的記者培訓班,並在校報上發表了她的處女作——採訪她們學校的一位同學Jessie Yan ,Jessie剛剛榮獲了2023年度全美中學生國際象棋比賽冠軍。


看到Kathleen發表的處女作,高興得我竟然淚零涕落。我寫信鼓勵Kathleen,我覺得這篇報道無論在選題、結構、開頭起事、結尾點題和內容取捨、遣詞造句等各方面,都寫得非常好,短短的幾百字,就能把Jessie從4歲開始,歷盡千辛萬苦的奪冠歷程展示出來,並且表現出Jessie Yan 的刻苦、失敗、總結、奮進,報道中, 還引用了她的幾句格言式的話語,突出了Jessie對失敗、奪冠、比賽壓力的真知灼見,同時還選取了Jessie的有代表性的的幾個同學和老師對她的評價,從旁印證了Jessie絕不是個「書獃子」型的少年棋手,
儘管下棋佔據了她大部分的業餘時間,但她仍然以友愛、互助展現了她的活生生的另一面。

我很欣賞她的開頭,僅僅用了一句話「There are only ten minutes left. The clock is ticking」就把讀者的心牢牢抓住,把讀者身臨其境般地帶了到緊張的比賽現場。然後層層推進,展現Jessie更多的內涵和精神境界,最後一句,也是我最欣賞她報道中的一句話:

「It』s not really about how well you do in the end,」 Jessie said. 「But that you have a lot of fun on the way.」

這句話ChatGPT給我翻譯成中文: 真正重要的不是最後的成績如何,傑西說道。而是你在過程中有很多樂趣。

我並不很滿意,要是我的話,我就譯成《真正重要的不是最後的結果如何,傑西說道。而是你在整個過程中所享受到的生活的樂趣》


我對她的評價是: 這篇文章只要有這了這麼一句畫龍點睛的結尾,就可算是一篇好作品。


我覺得,任何一篇作品,無論是一個大部頭的小說,還是一首小詩,哪怕是只有一兩句話的一篇隨想,只要裡面有一句堪稱流芳百世的經典的句子,就是傑出的作品。即使只是一個經典的淺顯道理,也可稱作成功的作品。


「幸福的家庭都是相似的,不幸的家庭各有各的不幸」,這是大文豪托爾斯泰享譽世界的名著《安娜·卡列尼娜》中的第一句話,其實只是一句再普通不過的話。卻成為歷代公認的世界名著經典。

抗清名將文天祥,被押解進京斬首路上的詩作《過伶仃洋》中最後一句話是:

「人生自古誰無死,留取丹心照汗青」

這是多麼偉大的情懷,就這一句話,就足以流芳百世。

當然,Kathleen的報道中,還有許多亮點。例如:

Jessie placed sixth during the 2022 U.S. Girls』 Junior Championship, and although she thought it wasn』t her best performance, she learned an important lesson from that match.
「I had a disastrous tournament, but it was also a lot of pressure to think I had to win every single game,」 Jessie said. 「It』s just easier not to think about the results. Take it one game at a time.」

Jessie strives to stay true to her own tips: reduce a game』s significance beforehand to avoid too much pressure during the game. 「Every game is just a game,」 Jessie said. 「One game is not going to decide whether you』re going to get into Harvard or not. Just try your best in every game.」

下面是報道的全文(為方便起見,我把ChatGPT的中譯本附后,。這是ChatGPT的譯文第三版本,我在「與ChatGPT過招"一文中,有詳細描述 與ChatGPT過招 - Duffy的日誌 - 倍可親 (backchina.com )


                  Jessie Yan』s Journey to Chess Mastery

             By Kathleen Zhu,     Journalism One |  May  22, 2023

 

                                                                    Courtest Jessie Yan

Jessie Yan is one of the champions in the 2023 U.S. Girls』 Junior Championship.

 

There are only ten minutes left. The clock is ticking, and sophomore Jessie Yan』s thoughts are constantly churning with the countless moves she can make. It』s the last round, and the only thing she』s focused on is the game board. Spotting an opportunity, she advances her piece across the patterned board, making a beeline for victory. She corners the king. Checkmate!

Jessie has been playing chess since she was four years old when her parents gifted her a chess set. She later signed up for chess clubs within her area. After playing the game for 11 years, she』s grown particularly fond of blitz and bullet chess, which both rely on a fast-paced playing style. In these categories, Jessie has amounted to a blitz rating of 2267 and is currently ranked in the top 250 players out of the active players in the US.

In July of 2019, Jessie placed third in a 10-day competition, the U.S. Girls』 Juniors, earning a $1,500 prize.

 

傑西·yan走向國際象棋巔峰之路

作者:Kathleen Zhu,新聞學一班

2023522

翻譯:張思遠

傑西·彥是2022年美國女子青少年錦標賽的冠軍之一。

只剩下十分鐘了。鐘擺滴答作響,大二的傑西·彥的思緒不停地盤旋著,她可以做出無數個棋步。這是最後一輪,她唯一關注的是棋盤。她發現了一個機會,她的棋子穿過有圖案的棋盤,直奔勝利。她將國王逼入死角。將死! 傑西從四歲起就開始下國際象棋,當時她的父母送給她一套國際象棋。後來她報名參加了當地的國際象棋俱樂部。在玩了11年棋后,她特別喜歡快棋和子彈棋,這兩種棋類都依賴於快節奏的下棋風格。在這些類別中,傑西的快棋等級為2267,在美國活躍選手中目前排名前250名。 20197月,傑西在為期10天的比賽中獲得第三名,這是美國女子青少年錦標賽,她獲得了1500美元的獎金。

 

「I think that was my first big breakthrough,」 Jessie said. 「I wasn』t expecting to get invited, but I somehow did, and everyone there was really good. I got third place, which was way better than I thought.」

Jessie placed sixth during the 2022 U.S. Girls』 Junior Championship, and although she thought it wasn』t her best performance, she learned an important lesson from that match.

「I had a disastrous tournament, but it was also a lot of pressure to think I had to win every single game,」 Jessie said. 「It』s just easier not to think about the results. Take it one game at a time.」

Recently, Jessie has been working hard, practicing daily on chess websites and in person. When not at chess tournaments, Jessie is always looking for ways to improve—especially when it comes to playing with people at her school, like her friends and even her teachers.

「I don』t think you can even call it a chess game when you』re playing against her,」 English teacher Babak Shahrivar said. 「I played her once, and she immediately squashed me. I don』t think she had to think during the game at all.」

 

我覺得那是我第一次重要的突破,傑西說道。我沒想到會被邀請,但不知怎麼地,我卻得到了邀請,而且在那裡的每個人都非常出色。我獲得了第三名,比我想象的要好得多。傑西在2022年的美國女子青少年錦標賽中獲得第六名,雖然她覺得那不是她最好的表現,但她從那場比賽中學到了重要的教訓。我度過了一場災難性的比賽,但想要每場比賽都必須贏得壓力太大了,傑西說道。不去想結果會更容易些。一次只看一場比賽。最近,傑西一直在努力,每天在國際象棋網站和實際對局中刻苦練習。當不參加國際象棋比賽時,傑西總是在尋找提升的方法,特別是與學校里的人如朋友和老師一起下棋時。當你與她對弈時,我覺得你甚至不能稱之為一場國際象棋比賽,英語教師巴巴克·沙赫里瓦爾說。我曾經與她對弈過一次,她立刻就擊敗了我。我覺得她在比賽中根本不需要思考。

 

 

To others, Jessie may seem this way when playing as well: laid-back and at ease. On the contrary, Jessie never stops thinking of possible strategies during a game, studying many tactics chess has to offer. This sort of dedication to the game often lends itself to stereotypes of being 「socially awkward」 or 「overly studious,」 but in actuality, Jessie is a sociable and fun person to be around, constantly cracking jokes.

According to sophomore Sandy Xu, Jessie enjoys tutoring kids and helping her friends progress in their own chess journeys.

During matches, Jessie strives to stay true to her own tips: reduce a game』s significance beforehand to avoid too much pressure during the game.

「Every game is just a game,」 Jessie said. 「One game is not going to decide whether you』re going to get into Harvard or not. Just try your best in every game.」

Because Jessie often attends tournaments and lessons, she isn』t able to spend as much time at school with her friends. Regardless, Jessie』s parents, friends and coaches are very supportive of her passion for chess, especially when they see her enjoyment and love for the game.

「Chess is part of my identity now, so it』s kind of hard to give it up,」 Jessie said. 「It doesn』t matter if you』re good or if you』re bad. You can always connect with someone else, and it』s really good to help make friends.」

Many of Jessie』s most memorable experiences and closest friends have been formed through the chess community over the years, whether it be in online chess forums or tournaments and classes. Jessie encourages everyone as she offers advice to her younger self: play more, be more confident, and most of all, just enjoy the game.

「It』s not really about how well you do in the end,」 Jessie said. 「But that you have a lot of fun on the way.」

 

 「I think that was my first big breakthrough,」 Jessie said. 「I wasn』t expecting to get invited, but I somehow did, and everyone there was really good. I got third place, which was way better than I thought.」 Jessie placed sixth during the 2022 U.S. Girls』 Junior Championship, and although she thought it wasn』t her best performance, she learned an important lesson from that match. 「I had a disastrous tournament, but it was also a lot of pressure to think I had to win every single game,」 Jessie said. 「It』s just easier not to think about the results. Take it one game at a time.」 Recently, Jessie has been working hard, practicing daily on chess websites and in person. When not at chess tournaments, Jessie is always looking for ways to improve—especially when it comes to playing with people at her school, like her friends and even her teachers. 「I don』t think you can even call it a chess game when you』re playing against her,」 English teacher Babak Shahrivar said. 「I played her once, and she immediately squashed me. I don』t think she had to think during the game at all.」

ChatGPT

我覺得那是我第一次重要的突破,傑西說道。我沒有預料到會被邀請,但不知怎麼的,我竟然被邀請了,而且那裡的每個人都非常厲害。我得到了第三名,比我想象的要好得多。傑西在2022年美國女子青少年錦標賽中獲得第六名,雖然她覺得那不是她最好的表現,但她從那場比賽中學到了重要的教訓。我在那次比賽中表現得很糟糕,但也有很大壓力讓我覺得我必須贏得每一場比賽,傑西說道。不去想結果會更容易些。一場一場來。最近,傑西一直在努力,每天在國際象棋網站上和實際對局中刻苦練習。當不參加國際象棋比賽時,傑西總是在尋找提高的方法,特別是在與學校里的人,像她的朋友甚至老師一起下棋時。當你與她對弈時,我覺得你甚至不能稱之為一場國際象棋比賽。英語教師巴巴克·沙赫里瓦爾說。我曾經與她對弈過一次,她立刻就把我擊敗了。我覺得她根本不需要在比賽中思考。

User

 

Jessie may seem this way when playing as well: laid-back and at ease. On the contrary, Jessie never stops thinking of possible strategies during a game, studying many tactics chess has to offer. This sort of dedication to the game often lends itself to stereotypes of being 「socially awkward」 or 「overly studious,」 but in actuality, Jessie is a sociable and fun person to be around, constantly cracking jokes. According to sophomore Sandy Xu, Jessie enjoys tutoring kids and helping her friends progress in their own chess journeys. During matches, Jessie strives to stay true to her own tips: reduce a game』s significance beforehand to avoid too much pressure during the game. 「Every game is just a game,」 Jessie said. 「One game is not going to decide whether you』re going to get into Harvard or not. Just try your best in every game.」 Because Jessie often attends tournaments and lessons, she isn』t able to spend as much time at school with her friends. Regardless, Jessie』s parents, friends and coaches are very supportive of her passion for chess, especially when they see her enjoyment and love for the game. 「Chess is part of my identity now, so it』s kind of hard to give it up,」 Jessie said. 「It doesn』t matter if you』re good or if you』re bad. You can always connect with someone else, and it』s really good to help make friends.」 Many of Jessie』s most memorable experiences and closest friends have been formed through the chess community over the years, whether it be in online chess forums or tournaments and classes. Jessie encourages everyone as she offers advice to her younger self: play more, be more confident, and most of all, just enjoy the game. 「It』s not really about how well you do in the end,」 Jessie said. 「But that you have a lot of fun on the way.」

ChatGPT

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對於其他人來說,傑西在下棋時可能看起來很悠閑和自在。然而,事實上,傑西在比賽中從不停止思考可能的策略,研究國際象棋提供的許多戰術。這種對遊戲的奉獻常常導致被貼上社交尷尬過分刻苦的刻板印象,但實際上,傑西是一個善於社交和有趣的人,經常開玩笑。

根據大二學生桑迪·徐的說法,傑西喜歡輔導孩子並幫助朋友在他們自己的國際象棋之旅中取得進步。

在比賽中,傑西努力堅持她自己的建議:在比賽前減少對一場比賽的重視,以避免在比賽中承受過大的壓力

每一場比賽只是一場比賽,傑西說道。一場比賽不會決定你是否能進哈佛大學。只要在每一場比賽中儘力而為。

由於傑西經常參加比賽和課程,她不能像以前那樣在學校與朋友們共度更多時間。儘管如此,傑西的父母、朋友和教練都非常支持她對國際象棋的熱情,尤其是當他們看到她對遊戲的享受和熱愛時。

國際象棋現在已經成為了我的一部分,所以很難放棄它,傑西說道。不管你是好還是壞,你總能與他人建立聯繫,結交朋友是非常好的事情。

多年來,傑西在國際象棋社區中形成了許多最難忘的經歷和最親密的朋友,無論是在在線國際象棋論壇上還是在比賽和課程中。傑西在向她年輕時的自己提出建議時鼓勵每個人:多玩一些,更加自信,最重要的是,享受遊戲

真正重要的不是最後的成績如何,傑西說道。而是你在過程中有很多樂趣。




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您說的太對了,我也不知為什麼?我也看到許多別人的博客中的圖片無顯示,請問您有何 見教?不勝感謝

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