和網友brav：發三首漢英對照的風景詩

千島湖

菩薩脫下翡翠裙，化出碧波綠水晶。

水清尚嫌無好景，瓔珞隨手撒其中。

風吹萬點琉璃綠，夕照一湖瑪瑙紅。

輕舟一葉來覽勝，秀色滿湖濕翠衿。



Thousand islands lake

Long long ago, a Bodhisattva spreaded out her jade-coloured skirt,
varied it into a whole lake of green crystal water.
But all of  this wasn』t her expectant works of art,
then she cast jade necklace into the lake apart.
As breeze blowing, thousand islands seem as floating green lazurite.
In sunset shining, a whole lake looks like rippling red agate.
Such scenery attracted me coming by a brisking boat.
The elegant scenery wet my blue coat and beat my heart.  



西潭攜友賞荷

贈君一塘芙蓉影，再加十里涼荷風。

寂寂天涯憑誰問，耿耿此心有君聽。

雪藕入泥真忍辱，清荷出水素無塵。

半生辛勤且放下，暫聽碧葉搖西風。


Enjoying Lotus with a Friend in Xitan

Dear friend, send you a whole pond of lotus shadow,
besides, add ten miles of  lotus smell to you.
In this remote corner, who would concern where I solo go?
Except you, who could know what I persistently do?
Enduring the dirt in mire, the snowy roots silently grow.
Blooming out of the water, icy lotus is quietly pure.
Put down all the painstaking in half lifetime we past through.
Please listen to the lively whistle in trees as winds blow.



西潭春晚

雲容天凈起海頭，冰河漸開溪細流。

紅蓼褪盡青蘆長，白雪消半綠鴛游。

日落林表千層秀，月照春波一潭幽。

滿懷心事何人訴，夜涼春鳥鳴啁啾。



Spring Evening in Xitan

Leisurely clouds are floating to the end of sky and sea.
Frozen river just thaws it flows in a narrow way.
Red knotweeds fall away but reeds are just green.
White snow is thawing and swimming ducks are so free.
On treetops, sunset spreads overlaps of graceful ray.
In moonlight, a whole pond appears quiet and pale.
So many worries in my heart, who can I say?
In cool evening, spring birds are crying from where they stay.

寫的很好，拿到日誌那邊發表吧，這邊有點冷清。 謝謝！

回復 brav 2樓 的帖子

啊，謝謝鼓勵哈！

回復 brav 3樓 的帖子

you too!

回復 解濱 4樓 的帖子

謝謝鼓勵！我習慣在這裡發東西了，這裡彭版主的水平很高，經常能相互印證學習。

回復 brav 9樓 的帖子

welcome!!!

回復 brav 5樓 的帖子

要不麻煩您轉過去好不好？

試著翻譯了你第二首的幾句，不好意思，獻醜了。

西潭攜友賞荷

贈君一塘芙蓉影，再加十里涼荷風。

寂寂天涯憑誰問，耿耿此心有君聽


Send to you, dear friend, lotus shadows of a whole pond,

Along with the scented summer breeze over ten miles.

In this secluded place of the world nobody would care,

And my persistent wishful thinking only you could share.



Read more: 和網友brav：發三首漢英對照的風景詩 - 詩詞古韻 - 貝殼村 -

回復 amassadinho 12樓 的帖子

已經觸摸到精神了，注意配齊韻腳。最好翻完全部，期待中~~~~~~

謝謝鼓勵。稍微修改了一下，是不是好一些了? 等有空再翻譯后四句。


Send to you, dear friend, lotus shadows of a whole pond,

With the scented summer breeze over ten miles along.

In this secluded place  nobody would care,

And my wishful thinking only you could share.

回復 amassadinho 14樓 的帖子

有進步！

回復 禪心如月 15樓 的帖子

多謝。下面是后四句，見笑了。

Deep into mire the snowy roots silently endure,

Above water the blossoms stand elegantly pure.

Put behind all the pains and gains we've gone through,

Just listen to the dancing of leaves as the west winds blow.

回復 brav 17樓 的帖子

me too.

回復 amassadinho 16樓 的帖子

west 就不用翻了吧，只要從意境上表達出蒼涼感就可以了。不錯，進步很大。

回復 brav 17樓 的帖子

Thanks.

回復 禪心如月 19樓 的帖子

That's just to balance.

回復 amassadinho 21樓 的帖子

ok,so it's good idea.

回復 禪心如月 22樓 的帖子

Thanks. But how about like this:



Deep into mire the snowy roots silently endure,

Above water stand the blossoms  elegantly pure.

Put behind all the pains and gains we've gone through,

Just listen to the dancing of leaves the wind whispers lure.


Read more: 和網友brav：發三首漢英對照的風景詩 - 詩詞古韻 - 貝殼村 -

贈君一塘芙蓉影，再加十里涼荷風。

寂寂天涯憑誰問，耿耿此心有君聽。

雪藕入泥真忍辱，清荷出水素無塵。

半生辛勤且放下，暫聽碧葉搖西風。

I like this one the most ! great writing !

回復 amassadinho 23樓 的帖子

最後一句更好點！