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本帖最後由 shanren 於 2009-12-13 21:48 編輯
Here are my 2 cents:
1.Try to keep the cover letter as short (and sweet) as possible – everybody is busy and nobody wants to read more than he/she absolutely has to. If you can express an idea with 3 words, don't use 4 or 5.
2.Try to use 「I」 very sparingly, especially at the beginning of each paragraph – You don't want to give the impression that you are 「so full of yourself」. It should be all about 「YOU」, Mr. Employer, not 「me/I」: Why I have the qualifications YOU are looking for, what I can do for YOU, why I will be an asset to YOU; instead of saying 「your position fits ME well」, say 「My education, training, career interest, and above all, strong hands-on experience will be a tremendous asset in this position.」 The reason: You are the 「seller」, not the 「buyer」, which means you don't get to say 「your position fits me well」; rather, put the focus on 「I am the perfect candidate for YOU!」
3.If you did well in Molecular Medicine and Bioanalysis (presumably these are key to the position for which you are applying), make a point by emphasizing your excellent scores.
4.I would drop the part about 「band 6 English proficiency」 - Americans are probably clueless about the Chinese English proficiency test system. If you can converse pretty comfortably in English, volunteer for a phone / online interview for them to check out your English proficiency
5.I'd open with Dear Sir / Madam (「To whom it may concern」 = a little too impersonal)
6. About the "lab accreditation" part: Instead of "I experienced xxx", why don't you say "I helped the lab become accreditated / I played a key / leading part in the lab's accreditation process" --- the underlying message should always be "anywhere I go, I contribute a great deal because I have the right attitude and know-how," not merely "oh yeah, by the way, I did that, too."
Hope it helps. Good luck! |
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