請大家幫忙修改英語求職信，歡迎指正，謝謝！

To whom it may concern:
　　
　　I am applying for the position of Immunology Technician, which was advertised on the website of ChinaHr.com. The position seems to fit very well with my education, experience, and career interests.
　　
　　I have a German "Diplom" degree in Molecular Biotechnology from xxx University, Germany. The courses that I took included Molecular Medicine and Bioanalysis. During my Diplom's thesis research I have acquired good experience in Elisa test.
　　
　　I possess good English skills: I had passed College English Test (band 6), when I studied in China. I have continued to study on my own and maintained my English skills at a high level. I can quickly retrieve and read professional literature and thereafter wrote my Diplom thesis in English.
　　
　　I have worked in the xxx Products Quality Supervision and Inspection Institute for about 3 years, engaged in food laboratory testing and analysis. During this time I have experienced the Laboratory Accreditation.
　　
　　 Please pay special attention to my good German language skills and many years of life experience in Germany. As a company with German background, you may prefer these skills and experience.
　　
　　I love laboratory research and development work and am confident of the development of the ICL (Independent Clinical Laboratory) in China. Your company aims to become China's largest Medical testing company. I wish I had the opportunity to help your company achieve this goal.
　　
　　I should be glad to have a personal interview and am looking forward to receiving your answer.
　　
　　Sincerely yours,
　　xxx

Here are my 2 cents:

1.Try to keep the cover letter as short (and sweet) as possible – everybody is busy and nobody wants to read more than he/she absolutely has to. If you can express an idea with 3 words, don't use 4 or 5.
2.Try to use 「I」 very sparingly, especially at the beginning of each paragraph – You don't want to give the impression that you are 「so full of yourself」. It should be all about 「YOU」, Mr. Employer, not 「me/I」: Why I have the qualifications YOU are looking for, what I can do for YOU, why I will be an asset to YOU; instead of saying 「your position fits ME well」, say 「My education, training, career interest, and above all, strong hands-on experience will be a tremendous asset in this position.」 The reason: You are the 「seller」, not the 「buyer」, which means you don't get to say 「your position fits me well」; rather, put the focus on 「I am the perfect candidate for YOU!」
3.If you did well in  Molecular Medicine and Bioanalysis (presumably these are key to the position for which you are applying), make a point by emphasizing your excellent scores.
4.I would drop the part about 「band 6 English proficiency」 - Americans are probably clueless about the Chinese English proficiency test system. If you can converse pretty comfortably in English, volunteer for a phone / online interview for them to check out your English proficiency
5.I'd open with Dear Sir / Madam (「To whom it may concern」 = a little too impersonal)
6. About the "lab accreditation" part: Instead of "I experienced xxx", why don't you say "I helped the lab become accreditated / I played a key / leading part in the lab's accreditation process" --- the underlying message should always be "anywhere I go, I contribute a great deal because I have the right attitude and know-how," not merely "oh yeah, by the way, I did that, too."

Hope it helps. Good luck!

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Delete "seems" and any expression that implies uncertainty.  I want to see an applicant who has bit of confidence about him/herself.

Are you sure you want to use "I wish I had the opportunity.." instead of " I wish I will have...". To me "I wish I had..." means that you already know there is no possibility.