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No.1

Farewell

When I say goodbye
Please don't cry!
When you say goodbye
I will smile.

Days fly!
Even though you are beyond the skyline
No matter I live or die
I still feel
A part of you will always be by my side.


No.2

Baby and Woody

Mummy,
Daddy,
Doggy,
See!
There is a woody on the tree.
He seems very gloomy.
What on earth did he see?

Woody,woody.
Don't be sad.
Please rise up your beautiful head!
Open up your bright eyes!
Now you are said to be a handsome boy.

Baby,baby.
You're wrong.
I lived in a distant town.
The way to here is very long.
But I know I'm fully strong.
So I'm up here to sing my song.
Now I really miss my hometown.

Woody,woody.
Don't be .
I can be your best friend.
I will beg Peter Pan.
He can make a perfect plan.
Then you can go back home again.
Please don't forget the girl named Ann.
She is your perpetual friend.

Baby,baby.
You're so kind.
Thank you for all that you have done.
I'm an emissary of Peter Pan.
I've been searching for kind-hearted kidds.
Would you like to go with me
to a world over the sea?
Peter Pan is there waiting for you
to take you to a magical world.

Woody,woody.
I wish I could.
But I can't leave my home.
Or my mummy and daddy will cry.
I don't want to see they're sad.
I will be with them all my life.
Please remember me to Peter Pan.
And tell him don't blame Ann.
I believe he knows the truth:
If only there is love,
everywhere can be called Eden.

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