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藍藍的天 發表於 2008-1-28 22:42 | 只看該作者 回帖獎勵 |倒序瀏覽 |閱讀模式
  一、避免使用語意弱的「be」動詞。

  1、把句中的表語轉換為不同的修飾語。例如:

  Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (轉換為前置定語)

  Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (轉換為並列結構作後置定語)

  2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變為行為動詞。例如:

  1) Weak: The team members are good players.

  Revision: The team members play well.

  2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

  Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

  3、在以「here」或「there」開頭的句子中,把「be」動詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如:

  1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

  Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

  2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

  Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

  二、多用語意具體的動詞,保持句意簡潔明了。例如:

  1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

  Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

  2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.

  Better: She compares prices and quality.

  三、盡量運用主動語態。例如:

  1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

  Better: Charity has supported the organization.

  2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

  Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

  四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。例如:

  1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

  Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

  2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

  Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

  3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

  Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

  4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

  Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

  五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業術語。例如:

  1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

  Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.

  2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

  Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
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